Like most people, I have often longed to write a moving and poignant poem such as master poets write. But it has not been easy finding an image sufficiently moving and poignant for an extraordinary poem.
Fortunately, I know that certain animals are poignant. For instance, I think most people would agree rabbits are poignant. Always poignant.
Yet, I am wondering whether my particular use of a rabbit in the following poem really does meaningfully convey the sense of poignancy one is quite apt to feel whenever one sees a rabbit?
I have loved you in the shadows,
And within the shadows
I have turned,
And turned again,
While loving you,
And longing for you
In the shadows
A rabbit might
Turn in the shadows
I have considered replacing the rabbit with an elk. Elk are much larger animals and therefore much more poignant than rabbits. Any suggestions you wish to offer would be appreciated.